the terrifing dead
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- www.bebo.com/zombiesraidinglondon
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- Publisher:
- steven hartland
- Me, Myself, and I
- this story i made was when i was board and i love zombie films and games.
so this book i have made this book cause zombies is one of my interests.
overnight the world has become a living nightmareof surreal proportions,with the planet's populationhit by an inexplicable, unfathomable and leathal plague-and the dead aren't dying. corpeses yearning for there next meal are now stalking the remaining survivours of london.
I HAVNT FINISHED YET BUT TELL ME WAT I CAN DO BETTER PLZZZ
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Rising Zombies.Com60 weeks agoHi, thanks for the add.
Hope you like my website – www.zombiedawn.com
From one zombie fan to another -
Jimmie Oliver88 weeks agoHey fellow-author,
If you are a self-respecting bookworm, then you could do a lot worse than read through extracts of my new book on www.bebo.com/JadedGoodie The 288-page publication can be ordered from Amazon, Blackwell or Waterstones and is due out at the beginning of March.
Best wishes -
Fluffles-The-Pink-Happy-Bunny102 weeks agoFYI, it's spelled "Terrifying" not "terrifing".
ok you should make it longer it was to short and spellings were quite bad but it dont matter just make it longer next and by the way it only deserves a 3 but like the way your going with it so igive it a 4
by Patrick F 57 weeks agoHi There were (not was) rubbish bags everywhere. There was no one in the airport. We were (not was) worried.
by Kerry 93 weeks agoAlso the pilots on the plane would need to speak with Air Traffic Control to get permission for landing, if they couldn't rouse Air Traffic Control they wouldn't land!
Your English, grammar, and spelling are all shockingly bad.
Learn the difference between there, their, they're and Your and You're.
You need to write about things you know and if you don't know find out, otherwise this will ruin the continuity and believability of the story.
These are all things that a publisher would see in the opening sentence of your story and then put the whole manuscript in the bin without even considering finishing reading it.
I know this sounds harsh; I got exactly the same sort of feed back when I started writing 10 years ago and it helped me, at the time I hated the person for telling me this, but now I respect their honesty.
Best Wishes.
"Back to England" I think you need to find something more realistic and more personal (to one particular character, not necessaraly personal to you.) to write about, it seemed like it was all over the place, you were jumping to quickly between things, I couldn't understand fully what was going on. Sorry, but that's how I feel.
by Fluffles-The-Pink-Happy-Bunny 102 weeks agoGood 3 stars because it is a good story but u need to sort out some things
by Stephanie Muir 110 weeks agoLike if the airport was empty why would a plane land there etc...
No offence or anything but.... I read the first part, then i couldn't read anymore because spelling and grammar mistakes really do my head in. Also a little more description wouldn't hurt...
by AmyZombie 113 weeks agoThat was horrible... Generally the thing is loaded with plot holes and errors, change the thing about the plane! Its moronic to think that a commercial airline would land at a airport with no functioning aircraft control tower and nobody on the ground to help bring the plane towards the main airport terminal so everybody can get off the damned thing.
by Edward R. McPherson 115 weeks agoAnd also the whole of London or even a country cannot turn into a funeral home roaming with biological hazards without flights being diverted, the big news corporations finding out something or that particular country closing its borders to try and keep the situation from spreading.
I consider you delete everything, plan something out in your head or on paper and start again.
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bore that sucked worse than sucked plz take it off an dont imbrass ur self please
by Connor Le Page 121 weeks ago