Sanctity
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- www.bebo.com/vampiressanctity
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- Ich über mich
- Intended to be a dark, chilling novel. Inspired by many significant works... A struggled attempt began when I was 14 and just...dragged on.
Please leave comments, I mean... how can I improve my writing if people don't tell me how?
I actually have written most of this out, only I have to kinda start again as it's on a different computer and... y'know how it is.
Anyway: the story.
This is the tale of four Vampires, trapped by time in immortal forms they can never be free from. The story mainly follows Anya, the lost and lonely girl, as she struggles to adjust to life with her sire Valentine and partner-in-crime Christian, until she realises that the thing she hates most is the very thing she has become.
αηуα: α ℓσѕт gιяℓ, вєgιηηιηg тσ яєgяєт
ναℓєηтιηє: тнє ∂єƒιηιтιση σƒ єνιℓ
¢няιѕтιαη: ¢υтє, ѕωєєт, ρυяє єνιℓ
яσѕє: ρяσ∂ιgу, нєℓℓιση
αηуα, ναℓєηтιηє, ¢няιѕтιαη, яσѕє, кαяєη, яα¢нєℓ, αηηιє, нєямισηє, яσωαη, ∂яαgєη, мαяιαη.
"σн нσω тιмє нαѕ ¢нαηgє∂ υѕ..."
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About the author
- Name: Louise Mitchell
- Age: 15
- Resides: Derbyshire
- Louise took up writing as a hobby a few years back and once reached a peak level of said hobby. But then, due to certain disastourous events which took place [including the breaking of TWO P.Cs holding replaceless literary work] and Louise's unsteady and almost jolting movement into her GCSEs, she had recently lost hope. But fear not, for now, what with the impending ending of her GCSEs [albeit the arrival of her A levels] Louise has once again dared to approach the ever-feared pen and paper [or rather keyboard and hard-drive]. Alas, it seems that life isn't so bad afterall... However due to a lack of time spent writing, and working on a talent which before was positively glistening [or so she says], Louise's writing skills are debatable. But, all is not lost, for skills improve with positive comments and good attitudes.0 Kommentare 745 Tage
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Jimmie Oliver93 Wochen herHey fellow-author,
If you are a self-respecting bookworm, then you could do a lot worse than read through extracts of my new book on www.bebo.com/JadedGoodie The 288-page publication can be ordered from Amazon.ca or Waterstones and is due out at the beginning of March.
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Louise108 Wochen herHey thnks n luv to my fans! I'l try n write sum more stuff, but I've been pretty busy with skoolwork
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Louise117 Wochen herThese chapters are only tiny, teensey parts of a whole big novel I've written, so it doesn't make much sense yet. When I've written it all up on here, it will.












5 stars hey!! thnnks for reviewing my book. Sorry for taking so long. It's been a long tyme since I've checked the King's Choice.Anywae, your book is totally fab. Great vocab, setting, description and background. I've become a fan and this book is defo getting 5 stars. Pliz keep writing
Well ofcourse you would, you wouldn't leave us hanging here...riiight????
So is there any romance at all here? As far as I could get waz that Anya was telling her story to the man in the cafe
So yea...even the beginning is captivating.
von Philockingtanne 86 Wochen her~Maryann~
IN LOVE!!!! I love it!!!! Its great youve got to go on!!!!
von Kierra Martin 90 Wochen herWOW! I really love it!!
von Bad Kitty 104 Wochen herVery detailed and explained a lot of the main character's background
Keep writing, I can't wait to read more!!!
P.S: Just to be fair, since I've done a review for your story, could you do a review for mine too, please?
www.bebo.com/love-me-forever
It's also a vampire story
Please review it, you know you want to
xoxoxox
Good but... I like the way u used the '...' in order to create suspence, but it's
http://www.bebo.com/1poleo
von Sam G 105 Wochen herin my eyes difficult to catch up with. However it was a good
read, please take a look at mine
thanks
Good, but needs a tidy up I have read through your chapters, and contrary to your first review, I think it is pretty good and does have potential.
von John Sharp 106 Wochen herI think the description as it stands is ok, though a little bit more fleshing out might help. (but don't waffle, thats the trick).
There are a few punctuation errors, yoyu used a colon a couple of times when other punctuation is warranted.
My suggestion, the one I make to most folk.
Run your work through MS Word, or Works for spelling/grammar check. Then read it aloud. I find it helps iron out imperfections
John
http://www.bebo.com/wolf-guard (a different take on vampirism)
http://www.bebo.com/Ezril-Rain-Dancer
Great start It's a good beginning, but I think the chapters are a little too short, and the story jumps from one place to another so often it's a bit hard to follow. The writing is great and the description is wonderful though.
You might want to correct a couple of spelling mistakes, too
von Battenburg 106 Wochen herkeep it up,
Emma x
I like it I like it but we really need more... like id love to read more of it with some more story whichit hasn't got into yet .. other than that i really like where it's going.. just watch out for the odd grammar mistake
von Richard Keaney 107 Wochen her2 stars 4 u the story has no pointenial, it all seems pointless. u need to add more details of the events it had happened like for example " Anya's rancid breath, smelling of blood, drew more blood from the pure white skin in Karen's neck."
von Fall Of Rizi. 118 Wochen heranyway it has a good storyline.
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